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Monday 14 March 2016

Writing

On the street, day time. Legs run along the pavement. They are Mark Renton's Just ahead of him is Spud. The are both belting along. As they travel, various objects, ( pens, tapes, CD's, toiletries, ties, sunglasses, and so on) either fall or a discarded from inside there jackets. They are pursued by two hard looking store detectives in identical uniforms. The men are fast, but Renton and Spud maintain their lead. Suddenly, as Renton crosses a road, a car skids to a halt, inches from her. In a moment of detachment Renton stops and looks at the shocked driver, then at Spud, who has continuing running, then at the two men who are closing in. He smiles. 


He hear footsteps getting closer to him as he tries to get away. He makes eye contact with the two guards and take little steps trying to get away. "Now where did your friend head off too," said the guard in a curious voice. As soon as the identical guards let go Renton speeded past the cars and headed off to Queen street. "Hey, you come back here where not finished here until you tell me what happened," demanded the guards.



This is my writing from this week. We got given a paragraph of writing which is on the top and we had to finish the paragraph off. My paragraph that I wrote is at the bottom. I was learning how to make my writing as a fast pace and make it flow.

2 comments:

Charlize said...

Your writing story has a really good pace,remember to show not tell. Awesome work!

Charlize said...

Your writing story has a really good pace,remember to show not tell. Awesome work!

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